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+Pokemon+ Not So Atrocious by ~Naoko-san:iconNaoko-san:



LEVEL FIVE

Up. Going up. Why going up? Did not want go up. Wanted eat tasty thing. Tasty thing not so tasty. Now go up. Get caught by bird? That mean no go back to water ever. Want go back to water.

Want to survive.

Out of water. No bird. No fall back in water. Feels funny. Flop flop flop. Where water? What that thing? Thing take me out of water? Something goes away from thing. Now coming closer. Now bright light. Now very dark. But safe.

Still survive.

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Is bright again. Back in water. Safe now? But do not want to swim away. Not know why. Thing there again, by water. Puts thing on my head. Why? Thing looking at two things. Two things fighting. No like fighting. Not strong. Bigger things win lots. Smaller things lose lots. Some no ever get chance to win. Small thing wins this time. Other thing goes away. Small thing goes to thing next to me. Feel stronger now. Not know why. But like. Like very much.

LEVEL TEN

Me much stronger now. All thanks to big thing. Big thing called “Naoko.” Me like Naoko. Naoko make me stronger. Me like small thing too. Small thing also called “Naoko.” Me not know why.

Big Naoko say me and small Naoko are Pokemon. How? Me look nothing like small Naoko.

Me no understand things big Naoko say sometimes.

LEVEL FIFTEEN

I be stronger than ever. Thing Naoko puts on my head makes me strong. I understand that now. But only works when I watch other Pokemon fight. I still no understand that. Today a pokemon that look like small Naoko fight and was shiny and bright when it won. When shining stopped, it looked different. It looked stronger. I want be stronger. Will I go shiny when I get stronger?

LEVEL 20

I feel even stronger! Naoko sound happy - am I shining like other pokemon before it become stronger? I so happy! I become stronger! Maybe I get bigger! Maybe-

!!!

This….

This hurts.

This hurts a lot.

Why does this hurt???

It feels like I’m on fire!?

WHY won’t it stop???

Am I… Dying???

I don’t want to die!!!

I want to SURVIVE!!!

I must... Survive..

I... Must...

Destroy.

I WON’T DIE.

I WILL MAKE THE HURTING STOP.

I WILL DESTROY EVERYTHING.

EVERYTHING WILL-


I feel a touch on my side. I can vaguely tell that I am much much larger now. What is touching me? I look down (my head is so heavy) and glare through the slowly lifting fog of pain clouding my mind.

Something standing on two legs with something on four legs on its shoulders. I feel something - recognition? Whatever they are, they are much smaller than me. I could hurt them if I want to. The small thing seems to know this and looks scared. Yes it should be scared.

The thing on two legs does not look scared. It’s looking at me strangely… Do I know a word for such a look?

I suddenly remember many things all at once - kind words, tasty pokemon treats, concerned looks whenever I was hurt, long nights camping by riversides just looking up at the stars…

Love.

That’s the word I was looking for.

Feeling placated and a bit tired, I slump down into the cool refreshing water. I happen to catch a glimpse of my reflection. I’m a completely different shape and color now, but I don’t really mind. I have fangs and I’m big.

Perhaps now I can truly help out this human that helped a little karp grow up to be a big dragon.
©2009 ~Naoko-san
:iconnaoko-san:

Author's Comments

**LENGTHY ARTIST'S COMMENT WITHIN**

*gasp!*

I'm writing again! :faint:

Been reading so many lovely stories while doing the journal features that I was feeling inspired.

Plus I've been playing pokemon and been raising one of these beasties, so that helps XD

Sorta got the idea for this piece when I read the Ruby Version pokedex entry for Gyarados:

When Magikarp evolves into Gyarados, its brain cells undergo a structural transformation. It is said that this transformation is to blame for this Pokémon's wildly violent nature.

Poor things go from a compact body with no sharp pointy things to a 20 foot long sea monster with fangs and horns. Guess its the pokemon world's equivalent of a human child going through puberty XD (was that a creepy comparison?)

I tried to show through the magikarps dialogue that it got a bit smarter as well as stronger over time. Upon reaching level 20 and beginning to evolve (and having its brain cells reconstructed) it got overwhelmed.

I do wonder how trainers with gyarados manage to keep them from killing them first thing after evolving. I like to think it plays out like this - Newly evolved gyarados wants to rampage, sees the trainer, remembers all the hard work the trainer put into making it stronger, and calms down.

Fun fact: Magikarp and Gyarados are based on an ancient myth that said if a carp could jump over the Dragon Gate, it would become a dragon. You can imagine that would take a lot of effort, just like how much effort it takes to raise a magikarp into a gyarados.

And yes - my pokemon trainer persona and my eevee character both have the name Naoko and they both coexist. I might explain someday ^^;

So what do you guys think? I have more ideas I can write if you guys liked this enough.

Pokemon (c) Nintendo
This story, Naoko and Naoko belong to me.

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:icond3v1l-m4n:
-tilts head- Interesting....Not the word...Amazing! -applauds wildly- Wonderful piece of work! I enjoy literature above all other art! I read a lot of things but this definitely grabbed my soul, shook hands with it, took it out to eat, and then called it back the next day. Lol..Wonderful.

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It may not be my business, but you're still going to have to go through me first.
:iconrazor23119:
Fascinating, my friend, truly wonderful. I'm most certainly faving this one, Naoko. This is truly a most intriguing glimpse into the mind of a pokemon. ^^

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"Man says God is dead, but even still Man dies
Jesus Christ still lives, so evidently Man lies."- Cross Movement
:iconnaoko-san:
Thank you very much ^^

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Do I classify myself as a procrastinator?

I'll tell you tomorrow~
:iconnaoko-san:
What a delightful metaphor for enjoying literature! Thank you ^^

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Do I classify myself as a procrastinator?

I'll tell you tomorrow~
:icondragondemon53:
That was fun to read. :3

I like the idea. I also love Magikarp and Gyarados. I always loved raising them. >W<

The puberty reference I think holds very true for women, because I don't know about you but I always get pissed as hell around that FANTASTIC TIME OF THE MONTH. =3=

Also I now have an extreme urge to go back and play Pokemon so I can raise my Magikarp again.

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Leviathan - ~X-men-Unlimited
Zephyr - *Keyblade-Warriors
Rowen - *Corrupted-Hearts

:rose:~LordKrogoth:heart:~dragondemon53:rose:
:icontherony:
Dragon like anyway, How they get a Flying subtype is beyond me. O_o

Anyway, you know I never thought about how they think while being trained or caught... Nicely done. ^_^

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Since we can't call people without wings angels, we call them friends.

The Insanely Sane Guardian Dragon
:iconnaoko-san:
Yeah seriously -_- (a comic touching on this subject: [link])

I find myself looking waaaay deeper into pokemon nowadays than I probably should XD;

Thanks a bunch ^_^

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Do I classify myself as a procrastinator?

I'll tell you tomorrow~
:icontherony:
*Roll lol's at the comic*

Its shocking they haven't owned that world by now. O_o

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Since we can't call people without wings angels, we call them friends.

The Insanely Sane Guardian Dragon
:iconnaoko-san:
If there were more of them in the wild, probably. But I don;t think many wild magikarp have the drive to try to evolve, so the world is safe~

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Do I classify myself as a procrastinator?

I'll tell you tomorrow~

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